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Beneath blue lights I flood the floor like unstrung beads in a frenzied pour.







 *linked with Open link night atdVerse. Amercian sentence created by Allen Ginsburg.

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  1. AnonymousJune 11, 2013 at 2:00 PM

    What a beautiful picture and sentence to match, I almost feel like I can fully imagine the picture with only the sentence.

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  2. LaTonya BaldwinJune 11, 2013 at 2:04 PM

    Hi Listningdaisy. It is a one-lined poem, a form created by Allen Ginseburg.

    Thanks for taking time to read and comment.

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  3. ClaudiaJune 11, 2013 at 3:30 PM

    love the energy of this...

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  4. LaTonya BaldwinJune 11, 2013 at 3:36 PM

    When it's this distilled, you pick your focus and move in a single direction.My hope was the movement, it's enegry. Thank you.

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  5. Brian MillerJune 11, 2013 at 4:08 PM

    ha nice imagery...and what a sight it would be to see eh? very cool

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  6. AnonymousJune 11, 2013 at 4:30 PM

    I know it's a one-line poem, but I couldn't help reading it as though it were a quatrain.

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  7. GraceJune 11, 2013 at 4:48 PM

    Short but powerful image of that energy in the rain ~

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  8. Laurie KolpJune 11, 2013 at 5:41 PM

    I like it... will have to give one-line poem a try.

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  9. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerJune 11, 2013 at 6:34 PM

    I love brevity although I don't always write that way--beautifully done!

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  10. VictoriaJune 11, 2013 at 7:03 PM

    The brevity and beauty of you well-chosen words just amazes me, LaTonya. Wonderful.

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  11. Tracy Kuhn GreenleeJune 11, 2013 at 7:15 PM

    i often think of the time i lost a strand of crystal beads -- and you put that image forever solid in my mind... thank you. simplistically perfect.

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  12. LaTonya BaldwinJune 11, 2013 at 9:31 PM

    Tracey, a high compliment thank you.

    Victoria, I work at longer forms but I confess I have an affinity for economy. I was hugely influenced by a professor about word choice and the poets I read most when I began to write. Thank you.

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  13. MargaretJune 11, 2013 at 10:08 PM

    Few words, but endless imagery (and noise). I suppose their are some "rules" or guidelines with this form. I'll have to google it. Thanks.

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  14. TCPCJune 11, 2013 at 10:45 PM

    wow!!

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  15. Susie ClevengerJune 11, 2013 at 11:51 PM

    This is beautiful, and the choice of image is perfect.

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  16. Jennifer WagnerJune 12, 2013 at 1:13 AM

    Love it!

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  17. kelvin s.m.June 12, 2013 at 6:48 AM

    ...ah, that flood is wearing silence that my ears would like to quaff... quite a noble surrender under the blue lights... smiles...

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  18. flaubertJune 12, 2013 at 10:49 AM

    So much said in so few words, LaTonya. Is this an American sentence?

    Pamela

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  19. Relyn LawsonJune 12, 2013 at 12:28 PM

    This is so beautiful it gave me shivers. You have quite a bit of talent, my friend.

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  20. emmett wheatfallJune 12, 2013 at 1:18 PM

    Wow! Brilliant! A one stich poem that's speaks volumes. It is a beautiful line of poetry. There are multiple parts with individual thoughts to be imagined. I LOVE this poem. If only poets would write more one line poems with this strength of poetic character. Lovely, most lovely!

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  21. grapelingJune 13, 2013 at 12:25 AM

    Fantastic, LaTonya. ~ M

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  22. AnonymousJune 13, 2013 at 3:58 PM

    this is gorgeous!

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  23. joannaJune 14, 2013 at 11:22 AM

    great image & imagery. i like the power/impact of this one-line form-- thank you for introducing me to it!

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  24. kalpana solsiJuly 24, 2013 at 9:47 AM

    The brevity of the poem conveys the message and a nice pic.

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  25. SusanJuly 24, 2013 at 10:09 AM

    Goosebumps--thinking how that must feel in arms and legs and everywhere. Pow!

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  26. Sherry Blue SkyJuly 24, 2013 at 12:33 PM

    Economical, fantastic imagery and movement.........impressive!

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  27. aka_andreaJuly 24, 2013 at 12:43 PM

    Wow, sharp, succinct and to the point. Really makes you feel the image.

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  28. AnonymousJuly 24, 2013 at 1:44 PM

    concise and quite beautiful

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  29. LaTonya BaldwinJuly 24, 2013 at 2:11 PM

    Kim, asked for vivid and viseral. I believe this form leaves no wiggle room.

    Thank you all.

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    1. Sharp Little PencilJuly 27, 2013 at 9:57 AM

      Great take on the prompt, LaTonya, and yes, you nailed it! All in a handful of words that leave me breathless. Amy

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  30. DulceJuly 24, 2013 at 4:19 PM

    no better words for the pic and beyond

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  31. Eileen T O'Neill .....July 24, 2013 at 4:20 PM

    The words express the image very well.

    Eileen

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  32. EllaJuly 24, 2013 at 10:44 PM

    I love yours!

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  33. AnonymousJuly 25, 2013 at 3:58 AM

    Wow!!!! This is fantastic LaTonya dramatic and vivid and the photo it is perfect =)

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  34. kaykualaJuly 25, 2013 at 5:49 AM

    Classic one-liner La Tonya!

    Hank

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  35. LaTonya BaldwinJuly 25, 2013 at 9:41 AM

    I think we all have a handful of poems of our own that we love. This is one of mine. Thank you for reading and commenting.

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  36. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJuly 26, 2013 at 6:03 AM

    Oh, well done!

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  37. Sharp Little PencilJuly 27, 2013 at 9:56 AM

    You have latched onto this form and made it sing, LaTonya. Brava@ And the pic is priceless. Amy

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  38. LaTonya BaldwinJuly 27, 2013 at 10:09 AM

    Morning, friend. It has been a challenging week. I'm glad for Saturday, coffee and poetry.

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  39. Sumana RoyJuly 29, 2013 at 6:42 AM

    The line bares the soul. Reminds me of the Haiku. Wonderful!

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