Tuesday, September 3, 2013

First date




You smiled. I said hello. Outwardly reserved, I knew you were equally giddy. We stared at one another then blushed when we caught the other's glance. Sitting in my Tonka toy in front of that grungy Greyhound station, we shared our first kiss. When I finally drove the car away from the curb,
I secretly hoped we'd end up somewhere.

We had dinner. It was one of those rare times I wasn't hungry. Later, we walked down quaint suburban streets. We smiled a lot. I was sure we waddled. We brimmed with excitement as intense as any fourth grader's first crush. 

We practically took up residence in a chic coffeehouse with oversized sofas and gourmet desserts. We drank cappuccino, sipped slowly as if time would keep our pace. At our rate, we wouldn't have to consider going to sleep for another twenty-four hours. Oblivious to the constant movement and incessant chatter around us, we pecked at each other like hungry newborn chicks. We must have looked foolish: two middle-aged romantics ogling each other in a public place. If we had been teenagers, we might have left and necked in a parked makeshift room on the side of the road.






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21 comments:

  1. Thanks for letting me in on that special moment, a moment of connection that so rarely happens.

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  2. Pecking at each other like newborn chicks...great imagery. I could really feel the excitement of new love in this.

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  3. Who cares what anybody thinks? You two were the ones having all the fun! :-)

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    1. Oh trust me, we weren't paying any attention to anyone else.

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  4. I'm sure you didn't look foolish - no one's ever "too old" for this moment. I love when I see new (and not necessarily young) couples. When you can see the expectation and almost feel the attraction. If I'd been in that coffee shop, I'm sure seeing the two of you would have made me smile - and not because you looked foolish, but rather because I'm sure you both looked so happy.

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  5. I think it is hard to write of romance well, but you do. You do romance very well.

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  6. nothing beats the excitement of new love! fun piece

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  7. ack this was perfect. and so reminds me of when my DH and I first met and fell for one another. another lifetime ago.

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  8. :) Romance... Love love love it.. i saw the 13 years and counting comment and For that reason alone I love this more.

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  9. Thank you all. I have a huge grin on my face.

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  10. Oh my gosh 13 years, that is a great story.

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  11. I love the analogy! And such a beautiful private moment to let us in on. Thanks for sharing it.

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  12. I have a huge smile on my face! This was sweet and tender and lovely!

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