Friday, August 30, 2013

haiku




dreams clawed open- wide
pomegranate seeds tumbling out
sticky dye stains grin




















27 comments:

  1. I'm not a fan of this form, but this one is just pretty cool.

    ReplyDelete
  2. I've enough bad haiku to feel the same way, Shay. Fortunately, I have met some amazing poets who do this form justice. I do what I can. Thank you, gurlfriend.

    ReplyDelete
  3. smiles...sometimes there has to be a breaking for the seeds to find light to grow you know....i like that there is a grin in the end as well...you dont always get that in the breaking...or realize it til after

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Very happy to hear from you, friend. I love the fall. I am grinning.

      Delete
  4. Love those sticky stains.. can tell a lot....

    ReplyDelete
  5. I am spellbound at the use of this fruit in this form of poetry. When I was a kid, I'd beak them open and eat the erils, these days, it's better to buy the juice. Of course the 'sticky dye stains grins' were more like 'Oh crap! cringes' when was wearing a white shirt! Good take on the prompt La Tonya!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thanks Shawn, the truth is I've been reading and writing haiku on and off for years. I love the form and appreciate the poets who do it well even more.

      Delete
  6. Excellent use of the picture to add more depth to this already worthy poem

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Hi Glynis, I almost always write a piece first and later find an image unless of course, it's a writing prompt and we're given a picture. Welcome to Black and Gray.

      Delete
  7. I love the idea of busting a dream wide open and relishing the potential in it-not packing it carefully away out of fear of what might or might not happen.

    "sticky dye stains grin" I loved this LaTonya!

    ReplyDelete
  8. Your first line is captivating...great image. I didn't research but assume pomegranates go with autumn? I don't know. Love the fresh scent of them. Wonderful haiku.

    ReplyDelete
  9. Good to see you hère at Carpe Diem LaTonya and with a truly wonderfully composed haiku ... pomegranates sliced open just like dreams do when you awake. A little gem ... I hope to see you here again.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Kristjann, I love what you do at your site even though I don't participate often. I look forward to changing that. And thank you. Glad you enjoy my offering. Your commitment and posts inspire me to try harder, to respect the essence and form.

      Delete
  10. Oh I love the sticky, dyed grin! So happy to see you are back to CD!

    ReplyDelete
  11. Such brilliant imagery! So evocative. Now I am hungry.

    ReplyDelete
  12. I find the imagery strangely delightful. It must be the sticky grin line. Thank you for linking up!

    ReplyDelete
  13. Love the vivid imagery. Dreams are messy but delicious.

    ReplyDelete
  14. Really Unique, and a very deep Haiku! Nice

    ReplyDelete
  15. Dreams clawed open - that just grabbed me and won't let me go.

    ReplyDelete
  16. I love haiku (sorry Fireblossom!) and this one is just gorgeous!

    ReplyDelete
  17. Lovely! I really love pomegranate (though they are a bit of a pain haha) and the seeds are so beautiful like gems

    ReplyDelete
  18. Sharp and sweet all in one little package.

    ReplyDelete

This is an interactive site. Dialogue is the aim here. latonya.blackandgray(at)gmail (dot)com

Thank you

Thank you
I know what I think. I write to hear what you think. Let's talk about it.