Saturday, June 22, 2013

Strummin' my sunshine with his fingers, whispering idioms in my ear



I'm a girl from round the way.
Maya's girl, the one with the sway
in her hips
and all that jazz.

If you step, boy
better come correct.

Don't fret none, son.
You're easy on the eyes-
a cool drink of water.

Come on baby light my fire.





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31 comments:

  1. ha. with attitude. smiles...the sway & the jazz, yep, better come correct...lol....nice rhythm to this one as well LaTonya

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  2. Nothin' wrong with a little old school. Just a girl from the D.

    Thanks, Brian.

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  3. feeling more like me in this space. Thank you.

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  4. What fun! I hadn't thought of the expression 'cool drink of water' in a long time!!

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  5. Opening lines is sassy, and all that jazz ~

    I like the fun & invitation ~

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  6. For me, the last line clinches this. It was great to begin with but The Doors, man. Dig? (Plus who could turn that down anyway?) -Mike

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  7. ha - very cool - this has just such a cool jazz feel that i wanted to take my sax and play along...smiles

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  8. ...ah, i liked the oozing seductive quality LaTonya... loved this... smiles...

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  9. Thank you all.

    I'm a Hill fan. I remember the young artist, the girl who was social, beautiful, gifted. I hope she returns because she has so much to give and we should thank her.

    One of my earliest influences poetically was Angelou. My folks are from down south and music, what can I say? I've been influenced by all genres, multigenerational.

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  10. Dear LaTonya,
    How did we miss each other? I love the song in your poetry, that ready to get up and go attitude. Hope to catch your poetry more often!

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  11. This is great LaTonya love the attitude, nothing like a confident sexy woman =)

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  12. ha, great attitude - love the rhythm... cheeky and original. a great write!
    ~Miriam

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  13. Great poem; great attitude. Enjoyed that one!

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  14. I love the strut and tease in this. Talk about an invitation! Really nicely done.

    Hey girl, please link back to Real Toads as well, since this is linked to our mini challenge. Thanks for taking part.

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  15. I can see and feel the strut in this piece. There is one confident woman speaking throughout it. Ending it with the Doors Light My Fire is perfect! Thanks so much for bringing it to Real Toads. It fit the challenge perfectly!

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  16. Somewhat in the vernacular - totally awesome working of the idioms - they sung out to me and brought me into the rhythm of your verse which I found light but complex.

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  17. Very nice! Reminds me of West Side Story: "play it cool, boy"

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  18. makes me wish I was young again...to at least say hello...but alas...fell over that cliff long ago...

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  19. This is dope!!!
    Hot like fiya.
    Ah luv it

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  20. Excellent. I can hear this coming from the lips of the woman in the picture!

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  21. Yowza - killer poem. He's a cool drink of water ... love that!

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  22. Glad to hear you all enjoy it. Thank Kelvin. His prompt reminded me to lighten up, enjoy the process.

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  23. It flows smooth nice and well. A jiving of life's goodness all the way! Great take, La Tonya!

    Hank

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  24. This reads really great flow with
    an air of mature writing.

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  25. So much strength, bravado in your poem ... I love it!

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  26. This is gorgeous, LaTonya. The melody is ingrained in the lines.

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